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Character profile:
Michael Bronx:- 35 years old, head paleoanthropologist working on the temple site, highly intelligent, risk taker, loner, not easily shocked, divorced.
Susan Ruffel:- 31 years old, Tasmanian State minister for science and technology, intelligent, good sense of humour, single, usually calm headed but can have a bit of a temper.
Christopher Nguyen:- 26 years old, newspaper reporter for 'The Australian', rash hot headed young man, highly inquisitive, single, brave.
Setting: Tasmania, The Franklin; present day.


The Story so far... Editor's Suggestions
Leaning back in her chair, Susan placed the brief she had been given nearly an hour ago, on her desk. She had read it many times and still found it hard to comprehend. Three months ago an ancient temple had been uncovered, after an earthquake of magnitude 8.5 on the richter scale had rocked the Franklin. The temple was composed of petrified wood and had been dated somewhere between 52,000BC and 60,000BC. More astonishing than this was that an outer chamber of the temple had written on the wall "And I will show wonders in the heavens and in the earth: Blood and fire and pillars of smoke. The sun shall be turned into darkness, and the moon into blood, before the coming of the great and terrible day of the Lord.' While an inner chamber of the temple had been found to contain several hundred different languages including: hieroglyphics; Mesopotamian text; Ancient Greek; Latin; Arabic; Hebrew; Cantonese; French; Shakespearian English; Modern English and even Hip Hop. All of which repeated the one message, 'The day is near'. Susan was not a woman who panicked easily, but the sinking feeling in the pit of her stomach was becoming hard to ignore. The question that kept going through her head was 'Why me?' 'Why have they given this brief to me?' Obviously the first thing she was going to have to do was contact this Michael Bronx, the man who had written the brief.

As Susan stepped into the Ford Territory, supplied for her forest treck, a noisy young man introduced himself as Christopher Nuygen, a reporter from 'The Australian' and he flopped out his identification. Susan was surprised that the newsworld had got there so fast. She wasn't prepared to speak to the press just yet. What was she going to say? But more importantly, was her lipstick on straight? Was her hair combed? Would she appear authoritative or like an empty-headed ditz? Her fears were groundless. The reporter strode towards her, admiration evident in his direct gaze. He was on her side. But, she thought, this was no time to be taken in by first impressions. She put on a civil smile.

'I hope you don't mind Ms Ruffel, I've been given permission to ride with you to the site.' smiled Christopher.

'I'll be happy to have the company,' Susan lied. In fact a hot reporter was the last thing she needed.

The ride was pretty uneventful. Most of the time they just stared out the car windows looking at the magnificent Tasmanian wilderness. Just when the atmosphere was begining to feel uncomfortable, Chris let out a slow gasp. Susan leaned over to see what Chris had just gasped at. There in the distance stood a structure about 10 stories high, with what looked like strange stone carvings all over it. As they got even closer, they could see that some of the carvings were of gargoyles and others looked like chinese dragons.

'What a story this is going to be,' exclaimed Chris as he released a slow whistle.

Susan tried not to look astounded, but her jaw dropped all the same. What the hell is it? she thought.

As the SUV pulled up in front of the edifiuce, Susan felt like the carvings were staring at her. A strange sadness swelled within her and she felt surprisingly alone.

'Did you see that?' Chris's voice startled her.

'You scared the hell out of me. What are you talking about? I didn't see anything,' Susan said unconvincingly.

'Are you sure??????? I think you know something I dont.'

'Honestly I know nothing.' A shadow passed across Chris's face. For a fraction of a second Susan could have sworn that Chris's features were carved from stone, the tanned skin seemed to have disappeared to be replaced by granite.The illusion passed as quickly as it had come. Chris looked confused...
'What was that?' he asked absent-mindedly.
'what?' Susan replied.
'That feeling in the pit of my stomach. It tells me to stay out, but...' he grinned mischievously, 'I don't think I will!' Fleetingly she thought that the reporter was probably going to prove to be a royal pain in the #&*.


























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Act 1-(Set up)
Develop the characters in view of the outline.

The story is moving along quite fine, but now it's time for a bit of conversation and some temple spotting!



























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